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Arise Snailguin,Arise.............
Vikki:
Love the 2 added chapters, very suspensful, leaving the readers itching for more,once again. i personally was really drawn in, and am very looking forward to what happens next, it's amazing, great job!.
rhea:
--- Quote from: Vikki on October 26, 2009, 08:19:37 PM ---Love the 2 added chapters, very suspensful, leaving the readers itching for more,once again. i personally was really drawn in, and am very looking forward to what happens next, it's amazing, great job!.
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I agree with you vikki. :)
Wow! eric I salute you and I admire your work, I have to spend more time to read the story and it's really really great. keep up the good work. :) :first: this is for you.
Mrok(Gloom)Robert M:
I agree with both lol :)
Also I like connection of power abilities and lowered speed in snailguin (with his a bit bothering look and snail slime lol) ... Its... complicated... but often in life we have contradictions in one place or in a person... And so we are forced to use our best skills to reach some goal... Goal that can be obtain in many ways... but also can be missed if its not our destiny... I guess I am drifting a bit too far from story... And snailguin affairs are rather a bit too much at beginning to really judge about it.... I mean... You didn't let us learn enough about your hero... yet... Anyway you have built great characters visibly affecting each other lives... Friendship is in play.. but also family connections... Snailguin somehow has a father in Will... Conversations are deep and often emotional... It really affects attention... I feel I lack some words lol... but also I cant keep up with many things lol.. so yea... Write on... Don't worry... You are leaving me with hold breath... but I am finally starting to breathe... so... I am not turning green... errr... I think loool
Vikki:
--- Quote from: rhea on October 27, 2009, 07:45:05 AM ---
I agree with you vikki. :)
Wow! eric I salute you and I admire your work, I have to spend more time to read the story and it's really really great. keep up the good work. :) :first: this is for you.
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yayy agreeing! lol.
--- Quote from: Mrok(Gloom)Robert M on October 27, 2009, 02:32:00 PM ---I agree with both lol :)
Also I like connection of power abilities and lowered speed in snailguin (with his a bit bothering look and snail slime lol) ... Its... complicated... but often in life we have contradictions in one place or in a person... And so we are forced to use our best skills to reach some goal... Goal that can be obtain in many ways... but also can be missed if its not our destiny... I guess I am drifting a bit too far from story... And snailguin affairs are rather a bit too much at beginning to really judge about it.... I mean... You didn't let us learn enough about your hero... yet... Anyway you have built great characters visibly affecting each other lives... Friendship is in play.. but also family connections... Snailguin somehow has a father in Will... Conversations are deep and often emotional... It really affects attention... I feel I lack some words lol... but also I cant keep up with many things lol.. so yea... Write on... Don't worry... You are leaving me with hold breath... but I am finally starting to breathe... so... I am not turning green... errr... I think loool
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wow Majko is agreeing too lol
ericb:
Thanks everyone. :) :) :) :) I will be writing another chapter real soon. :) :) :) Thanks again to all of you. :) :) :)
Posted on: October 28, 2009, 08:56:28 AM Chapter Six:
As they entered the store,Watkins observed the cashier as she
tended to a male customer. Niether had yet noticed the trio. "Now you wait right here by the
door" said wilder."Dr.Watkins and I Will be back in a few minutes." As they made their way
through the store, Wilder said "All I need is some eggs and milk." Why Wilder had chosen
to leave the Snailguin by the door was obvious. He didn't want for anyone to slip on the
trail of slime the the snailguin always left behind him whenever he moved.
As Wilder carefully selected his items,watkins observed the door as
it opened and closed every few seconds. From where they were a male voice could be
heard from the front of the strore saying "HEY!! What the HELL is this THING!? " Then,a
few moments later Watkins and Wilder heard a female voice saying "I think it just
moved! Is that thing.............. .ALIVE!?"
"We need to get up there............NO W,Watkins said. Quickly,Wilder
succured his items and then he and Watkins made their way to the front of the store.
Again they heard the males voice saying " I don't know about y'all,but this THING creeps
ME out!"
Upon reaching the front of the store,the two noticed a group of
around nine people gathered in a circle around the snailguin. From behind the counter
the cashier was leaning to her right,as she was trying to see what it was that was
causing such a comotion. "Excuse me everyone,she said."Can I ask what's wrong?"
Then,from within the gathered crowd came a high pitched
squeaky voice saying "Hi.I'm Snailguin.How are all of you?" Slowly,every person who'd
gathered around the Snailguin began to step back. "Oh no,Watkins thought to
hmself."Trouble". From the crowd a young man,around 19 or so years old slowly made
his way toward the Snailguin.Holding his hand was a young woman around 5'6'',with
blonde hair.She was very attractive."Hey,the young man said."You can talk!!"
"Yes,I can talk,the Snailguin responded. The young woman
who was with him smiled."I think he's cool,she said.She wore blue jeans,black sneakers,
and a black T-shirt. Turning toward her the young man who was dressed in blue
jeans,black sneakers,a black T-shirt,and leather jacket said "I like him too." Then,turning
back toward the unique creature before him he asked "Now,what did you say your
name was again? Snailguin?"
Before the Snailguin could give an answer the young man and his
female companion were rudley shoved aside by a very large man. this man around 6'5" and
350 lbs,had long dark hairand a thick dark beard. He wore black jeans,and a leather vest
over his extra large white t-shirt. This man also wore black motorcyle boots.
After he had shoved the young pair aside,the man screamed
"What the HELL!!? You two GEEKS like this.........THING!? I'll tell you what is is.It's a darn
FREAK,is what is is! Someone needs to get ....THIS the hell out of here." The young man
was about to respond,only to have his mouth covered by the left hand of his female
companion."Don't say a word,she whispered."That guy's alot BIGGER than you." As
Watkins and Wilder approached they caught sight of a large, horned,flaming skull upon
the back of the man's vest. Above it were the words:DEMON LORDS.
"Why don't you like me,the Snailguin asked,his voice showing a
great sadness as he spoke these words. "What did I do to you?" As the bewildered
crowd looked on,the man balled up is right fist,and with all his might he struck the
Snailguin square in his beak.While the Snailguin was unaffected bythe blow,such was not
the case for the man who had struck him. He dropped rapidly to his knees,all the while
screaming in agony. As he clutched his right hand he screamed "That...THING just broke
my blasted hand!"
By now,Wilder and Watkins had reached the Snailguin. Watkins
then said to the injured man "You broke your OWN hand,when you hit him,you IDIOT!"
He then turned toward Wilder and said "Pay for you things.I'll take the snailguin to the car."
As Wilder made his way to the cashier,Watkins took the Snailguin's right wing into his
left hand,pulling him along as he exited the store. As they left the crowd was quick to
notice the trail of slime that the snailguin left behind him as he moved.
Wilder quickly purchased his items and went outside to join them.
The crowd was still silent,save for the man on his knees. Still clutching his right hand, he
was now screaming profanities.When they had reached Wilder's car,Watkins opened the
front passanger's door,thinking to assist the Snailguin inside as Wilder put his items in the
trunk.
A few moments later,they hearda voice saying "That THING broke my
freaking hand,now it's gonna pay!" The man was now standing directly in front of the car. They
had been too preoccupied to have seen him coming out of the store after them. The man was
now wielding an metal pipe in his left hand. As he pointed it at the Snailguin he said "You
broke my hand FREAK! Now,I'm gonna break.....YOU!"
To Be Continued.......... ...
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