Topic: I know i have been gone

[ericb]

yes,you have alot of talent,i take it this is about a person you must miss alot?

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

Haha ... why you are unsure? ... Something in details? ... Wanting more perfection from the flow? ... Alone tears description idea is making my jaw fall from its professional effect ... What about the rest?... I mean the whole art ... You are unsure about your greatness lol ... Maybe you are lifting bar of difficulty for yourself lol ... Still you are a bit brutal with comparison to bricks ... Imagination can make me feel it lol ... Ouch ... haha jk ... I think its exactly what is needed ... Good choice and perfect mounting ... Oh... reading it slowly is like pushing play and watching whole movie ... till the crowning end ... and very anxious end lol ... What do you mean by you don't have to miss me?? ... I am certain its not some sort of Easter egg lol ... I have only faint trace of what it can mean ... Oh I know you Grebels ... You are going to leave me hungry to know lol ... Fine... I will pretend I know nuthin

[hazel681]

when did this decision
start sinking in
last time it was like you never left
after all this years journey
of climbing over these walls
i look back at you
and you have changed your heart
i dont want to talk to you
i dont want to see you tonight
this is the greatest hurt i've ever known
and now its too late take it back
how can you laugh when you have just lost us?
i dont understand one bit
i throw myself around this room
marks all over my skin
tells me how this is the end
i have to let go
i have to make you free
you dont know what you want
but you know that it wasnt right
and now this to me
is so wrong
i have to wrap my mind around
that you are just a friend
cant pull myself together in time
before you go back home
i cant hold onto this ghost
its what i desire more than most
of these feelings
i cant do this anymore
i dont what to do next
i have to go my own way
but where it is, you wont follow me
will i see you there?
maybe not since you are done with me here

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

Previous gave me little deja vu ring... This one gave me deja vu bell lol... Its hard using memory remembered for a great value but saved by one reminder... You have justified claims to it by deeper trace of experience... A character of this story is known to me by sharing this life part... Confession of the heart... Diary of the moment... Memory is a bit like a book... You can close it... but its content is magical - shining through thick cover... whispering in moments of your silence... Great hurt is a hidden shout - manifested with speaking sadness... I think I know why you wasn't sure about previous... I bet you have the same feeling to this one... Artists satisfaction of a ready creation can dwell next to fatigue from process of creation... Your secret is the clay you use for your monuments... Writting talent is a chisel... It can cut out what is boring, ugly, unnecessary or unwanted, but you cant erase the essence... You even want it to stay... Sometimes we jail sad power... because it belongs to creation purpose... You save the moment... We can look back... We can learn more, better, respect the past... Art is giving more perception angles... It knows you... Piece of your heart 

[ericb]

Previous gave me little deja vu ring... This one gave me deja vu bell lol... Its hard using memory remembered for a great value but saved by one reminder... You have justified claims to it by deeper trace of experience... A character of this story is known to me by sharing this life part... Confession of the heart... Diary of the moment... Memory is a bit like a book... You can close it... but its content is magical - shining through thick cover... whispering in moments of your silence... Great hurt is a hidden shout - manifested with speaking sadness... I think I know why you wasn't sure about previous... I bet you have the same feeling to this one... Artists satisfaction of a ready creation can dwell next to fatigue from process of creation... Your secret is the clay you use for your monuments... Writting talent is a chisel... It can cut out what is boring, ugly, unnecessary or unwanted, but you cant erase the essence... You even want it to stay... Sometimes we jail sad power... because it belongs to creation purpose... You save the moment... We can look back... We can learn more, better, respect the past... Art is giving more perception angles... It knows you... Piece of your heart 

rob,you have a talent for analyzing writing.that's a good thing.

when did this decision
start sinking in
last time it was like you never left
after all this years journey
of climbing over these walls
i look back at you
and you have changed your heart
i dont want to talk to you
i dont want to see you tonight
this is the greatest hurt i've ever known
and now its too late take it back
how can you laugh when you have just lost us?
i dont understand one bit
i throw myself around this room
marks all over my skin
tells me how this is the end
i have to let go
i have to make you free
you dont know what you want
but you know that it wasnt right
and now this to me
is so wrong
i have to wrap my mind around
that you are just a friend
cant pull myself together in time
before you go back home
i cant hold onto this ghost
its what i desire more than most
of these feelings
i cant do this anymore
i dont what to do next
i have to go my own way
but where it is, you wont follow me
will i see you there?
maybe not since you are done with me here

Love the way you express yourself.Is this about a person you miss dearly.i hope you see them again

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

Lol Eric  ... I need to ... I am customer

[hazel681]

Thank you eric and rob !! yes rob writes awesome feedback!! i love reading it like hes writing a piece of his thoughts and putting it into a sort-of poem its cool! thanks guys!
new one


you can hear my sadness
it plays like a broken record
keeps me in a safe zone
its too comfortable
lacking an inner motive to move
i dont need any special route
to get to where im going
walking in a circle
waiting for an opportunity to break free
withdraw my mental reservation
i wear my misery
i own my absence
they may look like chains
but i wear them as jewelry
i prison my thoughts
because sometimes they scare me
they echo and tempt me
i wish i wasnt so..
i dont want to learn to let go
wonder what its like to feel content
without a rush of disorientation
a smile that speaks loneliness
searching for a peace of mind

[ericb]

Thank you eric and rob !! yes rob writes awesome feedback!! i love reading it like hes writing a piece of his thoughts and putting it into a sort-of poem its cool! thanks guys!
new one


you can hear my sadness
it plays like a broken record
keeps me in a safe zone
its too comfortable
lacking an inner motive to move
i dont need any special route
to get to where im going
walking in a circle
waiting for an opportunity to break free
withdraw my mental reservation
i wear my misery
i own my absence
they may look like chains
but i wear them as jewelry
i prison my thoughts
because sometimes they scare me
they echo and tempt me
i wish i wasnt so..
i dont want to learn to let go
wonder what its like to feel content
without a rush of disorientation
a smile that speaks loneliness
searching for a peace of mind

hmmmmmm,seems to me like you're soul searching.I'm gonna give you some advice straight out of glenn beck's page.He wants to know if we are all the person we were meant to be,or the person we've allowed ourselves to become.If you become who you were meant to be,only then can you be alot happier.god bles,that's a great poem.

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

Dammit lol... Whats wrong with me today? ... I don't know from where to start... Its like all my thoughts turned into a crowd and now every wants to be a first to mention... Gratitude, confusion, wonder, care, fun... Writting things can be a hard stuff sometimes lol.... So... focus and control... I guess fun first, since a smile can break a bad charm lol... The idea of comparing you to the record made me wish to grab you, put you on the floor like a disc and make DJ scratching tricks by quite fast change of rotation... I guess you could come out from it with serious dizziness haha... Without mentioning that Vikki would be faster and she would grab me like a little baby, put me into a cradle, give me a bottle and propably sing me lullaby's... Save me... I mean song "Save me" haha... Now gratitude lol... Thank you for posting it... Your arts are letting us know your complicated personality, take important lessons, admire craft, feel more, and receive experience... I am also thankfull for valuing my comments... Actually you made me see that I really made them quite poetic... Maybe it means that my broken talent is somehow weird and takes source from some strange energy... Anyway, confusion... if I didn't charge it in the middle already lol... Your poem is giving me a very strong presentation... filling my mind with much of information... but senses are not a machine... and Math fails when we simplify... I mean... You are giving me correct relation... Your poem is the exact mirror of what it represents, but also... it gives me a dorky hunger... to see it more exactly... Don't feel bothered though... I am just explaining emotions lol... and such need for knowing more is one of the successful effects on reader... How many stories we would like to see continued?... How many times we regret some characters fate?.... Often its a good starting point for our imagination to wonder about... Hmmm... my mind is getting back to working roll lol... Swift move into wondering... without marking when I did that... I guess I forgot that emotions can dwell even in one sentence and each name of emotion is just a pattern... I only needed to warm up my brain electrical net... I see I left essences of care for the last... Interesting coincidence...

hmmmmmm,seems to me like you're soul searching.I'm gonna give you some advice straight out of Glenn beck's page.He wants to know if we are all the person we were meant to be,or the person we've allowed ourselves to become.If you become who you were meant to be,only then can you be allot happier.god bless,that's a great poem.

Eric is right... Actually his point helped me much to even start my comment lol... You are searching, but more as waiting... Something like a charmed princess lol... Maybe you should know that we love you the way you are, and yes - we wish along with you for the right changes... Maybe its like learning to walk... Every little bit of better control helps... Time can be an ally... Rush helps only if logically or intuitivley supported... You are queen of your life... with all the stress of wearing the crown... Its ok the way its now... but we will keep on working on making it better... and your poems are the essential story... A vessel for your soul... Hard to explain link between your heart and good reader senses ... Write on

[ericb]

Dammit lol... Whats wrong with me today? ... I don't know from where to start... Its like all my thoughts turned into a crowd and now every wants to be a first to mention... Gratitude, confusion, wonder, care, fun... Writting things can be a hard stuff sometimes lol.... So... focus and control... I guess fun first, since a smile can break a bad charm lol... The idea of comparing you to the record made me wish to grab you, put you on the floor like a disc and make DJ scratching tricks by quite fast change of rotation... I guess you could come out from it with serious dizziness haha... Without mentioning that Vikki would be faster and she would grab me like a little baby, put me into a cradle, give me a bottle and propably sing me lullaby's... Save me... I mean song "Save me" haha... Now gratitude lol... Thank you for posting it... Your arts are letting us know your complicated personality, take important lessons, admire craft, feel more, and receive experience... I am also thankfull for valuing my comments... Actually you made me see that I really made them quite poetic... Maybe it means that my broken talent is somehow weird and takes source from some strange energy... Anyway, confusion... if I didn't charge it in the middle already lol... Your poem is giving me a very strong presentation... filling my mind with much of information... but senses are not a machine... and Math fails when we simplify... I mean... You are giving me correct relation... Your poem is the exact mirror of what it represents, but also... it gives me a dorky hunger... to see it more exactly... Don't feel bothered though... I am just explaining emotions lol... and such need for knowing more is one of the successful effects on reader... How many stories we would like to see continued?... How many times we regret some characters fate?.... Often its a good starting point for our imagination to wonder about... Hmmm... my mind is getting back to working roll lol... Swift move into wondering... without marking when I did that... I guess I forgot that emotions can dwell even in one sentence and each name of emotion is just a pattern... I only needed to warm up my brain electrical net... I see I left essences of care for the last... Interesting coincidence...Eric is right... Actually his point helped me much to even start my comment lol... You are searching, but more as waiting... Something like a charmed princess lol... Maybe you should know that we love you the way you are, and yes - we wish along with you for the right changes... Maybe its like learning to walk... Every little bit of better control helps... Time can be an ally... Rush helps only if logically or intuitivley supported... You are queen of your life... with all the stress of wearing the crown... Its ok the way its now... but we will keep on working on making it better... and your poems are the essential story... A vessel for your soul... Hard to explain link between your heart and good reader senses ... Write on

Thanks Rob. I think Glenn Beck's question is one we should all ask ourselves.Are you the person you were MEANT to be? OR the one you've ALLOWED yourselve to become? This is,if you're not the person you were meant to be,you will not be happy no matter how much or little,money,friends,or "stuff" you have. I hope Hazel,and everyone can be the person the were meant to be.it's not easy i know,i'm still trying to find the answer to that question regarding myself,lol.but it's been a rewarding struggle.

[hazel681]

so much that i want to say to you
appreciating our conversation nonetheless
not a face to face daily interaction
taking a toll on my feelings, for they crave
just the opposite thats given
oh well, i suppress it, believing that
im left with no choice
jumping from one cliff to the other
cant choose a side, a thought to stick with
feeling worn thin, almost threadbare
waiting for the madness to end
as it will pick back up again
just wanting to see you
my eyes stinging from the frustration
i've outgrown this place
my environment incompetent to who i am
about to burst, the idea of new experience and
different horizons
maybe an adventure together
i can taste it, but simply entrapped by time and placement
though i feel so lost, arent we all just as lost as each other?
negativity just a compromise to reach the other side
i must sacrifice these things here
walking around my normal scenery
but everyday, still seeking out your face
in case i missed something, or maybe a hopeful
chance im imprisoned in,
for those that i list, although my list does not end there
lacking by all means of meaning
my flaw of a wandering mind
but ready to take on actual living and happiness
a desire to share it, slipping away from conformity
knowing that you have the same as me,
you're chasing after it too
for its not me and you,
if all there is me

[ericb]

so much that i want to say to you
appreciating our conversation nonetheless
not a face to face daily interaction
taking a toll on my feelings, for they crave
just the opposite thats given
oh well, i suppress it, believing that
im left with no choice
jumping from one cliff to the other
cant choose a side, a thought to stick with
feeling worn thin, almost threadbare
waiting for the madness to end
as it will pick back up again
just wanting to see you
my eyes stinging from the frustration
i've outgrown this place
my environment incompetent to who i am
about to burst, the idea of new experience and
different horizons
maybe an adventure together
i can taste it, but simply entrapped by time and placement
though i feel so lost, arent we all just as lost as each other?
negativity just a compromise to reach the other side
i must sacrifice these things here
walking around my normal scenery
but everyday, still seeking out your face
in case i missed something, or maybe a hopeful
chance im imprisoned in,
for those that i list, although my list does not end there
lacking by all means of meaning
my flaw of a wandering mind
but ready to take on actual living and happiness
a desire to share it, slipping away from conformity
knowing that you have the same as me,
you're chasing after it too
for its not me and you,
if all there is me

From what I'm reading,I think maybe the best thing for you to do would be to make some changes. It seems to me like you feel like you're walking in one direction,but not getting anywhere. It's time to move in a diferent direction,regarding both people and things.great writing by the way.

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

Eric is right, even a little adjustment to life can do the trick. Besides, aren't we talking about something you are putting into motion already? You can act when you see what you have before yourself. Life is pile of clay. You have power and tools. Certainly you have amazing and talented soul... Artists make it more beautiful by their sensitivity. I guess its called breaking through confusion to get exact picture of your thinking lol. Jk... Life kicks a@# with sadness. I know... I guess its easier to be strong in comparison to attempt on helping others to be... Sometimes all we can do is to offer ourself as shield, support and company - A friend deed. Even proper modulation to reading is like melody. Slow and nostalgic... Sounds are sewn in proceeding emotions. I guess freedom is when you have more options that you can take than those you cant... or you acquire it by some simultaneous method. Its always easier to get lost. Whole picture is complex. There are things you really have... so much is just making bus stop in endless travel. I have great wish to see you writting very happy art, but maybe we better don't exceed facts lol... Its not about waking up from one state... Its like blooming of a flower... You need sunlight, water... and hmmm... proper ground... I cant control your focus... Maybe I can advertise... I feel like betrayer haha... I hate adverts because most are disrespecting... Hmmm... Maybe I can give you freedom options... I have nothing against you writing what is absolutely in your plan... but also I have some wish order... and you can pick up... a destiny that you are founding with bitting of your heart... or maybe some invisible helping angel hand... In the end its all about you... You live in this world... W are only helping you... And we love you whatever option you take... You have all the Universes