Topic: Poems from Angel of Sorrow...

[hazel681]

yeah i was wondering why you havent been on here for so long? are you ok robert?

[Fiona682]

obviously hes not, didnt you read that? that wasnt a perticularly happy statement. dont bother thanking me for commenting Robert but you a really good, although i must say i like your Kelly Birthday poem better then the one above but thats just me. And not to sound like the rude little grammare snob but "A"s can be a good think. you dont seem to like to use them

[dutchgirlfan]

Don't worry about us robert. You don't have to explain. I just hope things will work out for you! Good luck.

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

Ummm... Thanks again for your care... Its funny I thank for it so late... but I see we talked it over very well... I dont have much access to computer lately... but... somehow it gave me time to write something by myself... and yeah... haha... I dont like use of "A"s... I think this poem is hard... I dont count anybody will understand... but... maybe the key is not to comprehend all its story but to find at least the most essential piece... Anyway... Its here for you to try and to make judgement...

Afraid of losing loved

Silent heart drowns beat in outside world
Chilled blood rotate wheel of time
Letter stays clenched and unfold
Hope is gone from stopped eye

One life closed in tiny bubble
Secrets taken away from ground
Never again in emotions trouble
Forever lost and not found

On my shaking hands
Drinking my will and faith
Beauty bruised by winter glass
I came too late

Scream deforming air waves
Across border of impossible
Message filling all the place
Transient truth is visible

Poison cant relieve my pain
Jammed almost all doors
Impulsive spirit in strain
Emptiness hungry for food

Heavy hands chained in pray
Soft words avoiding thoughts run
Tension in sides play
I disobey evilness plan

I squeeze enemy inside
Wounded energy is now mine
The second try to hide
Trapped by God Eye

I watch tragedy of fallen
Short lines against eternity
Their redemption is stolen
Unworthy even my pity

Code of mercy blurred in souls
Faith is archaeologist
Light melts only opened stones
For them untitled bliss

[dutchgirlfan]

hmm...yes this is a difficult poem...your words are incredible you know. This one is reallly deep and I think I will have to read it a few times more....I have the feeling I got the message but i can't find the right words too describe it... hmm...

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

hmm...yes this is a difficult poem...your words are incredible you know. This one is reallly deep and I think I will have to read it a few times more....I have the feeling I got the message but i can't find the right words too describe it... hmm...

Good... The message is the most important... so... no worries about all the else...

I dont like fact that this poem is like complex of many other poems I wrote... but its the best I could do... and I like its flow and meaning anyway... Silly thought is - how I dare to speak about love since I dont have it... but... I had it for someone... Now... I even try... so... judge your own knowledge by how you give love... and enjoy... Well... I wish I wrote better... but I guess... I am weak... maybe... I will get better chance some other time... I need something more than wish and inspiration...

Road to Eden

I send my eyes under invisibility
I dont want you easily to know
I learn well your shame sensitivity
I let you take it really slow

Its a game of two
Till it turn serious
You affect me
I beg for new dose

I am eye hunter
True catch is hidden
I am just path finder
Searching for love gem

I like to read your signs
My focus glimpse around you
I kneel on your smile
The connection is true

We keep on dancing in rain and Sun
Always only in soft touch
Gentle words hug to avoid run
I am afraid of crash

You make yourself beauty
More than a lot
I call you silly
But you know what I want

I worship your taste
The way you walk
The way you stare
The way you talk

I want you more in my life
You fallow my guide
I dream to make you my wife
You stand by my side

Not much to make it happen
Just give it some time
Make talk drown deeper
Let happiness to climb

Similarity in broken contradictions
Secret of fulfillment
Love curls around definitions
Its not easy experiment

You need my support
My need makes no difference
Together as warmth against cold
Alone we are losing sense

You call me strong
I name you essential queen
Our life is a song
Love story with no movie fin

Silly argue spoils the air
Tears are breaking us both
We agree sometimes its unfair
Two dots in huge world

We glimpse through all good and bad
Feeding the second by own light
Love grows from home sand
We travel on energy flight

Miracle of life sent us here
To find each other
Angel sword in whirl
We cross Eden border


And like every written or said formula of love.... its not complite... Only fullfilled love is... You better try to experience it... with care, patience and good heart... and anything else like that and I cant name or I cant remind... duh...

[hazel681]

aww i LOVE it its amazing your so rad robert!! i can actually understand it *thinks of special person*

[ummm]

I worship your taste
The way you walk
The way you stare
The way you talk

I want you more in my life
You fallow my guide
I dream to make you my wife
You stand by my side


That is my favorite part, simply beautiful and so relatable, the whole poem.

[dutchgirlfan]

well...you don't have to have love at this moment just to be allowed to make such a gream poem. It's about how you write it; with or without feeling.... you did a good job Robert but I miss articles but idk...that's my opinion.

all in all well done.

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

aww i LOVE it its amazing your so rad robert!! i can actually understand it *thinks of special person*

Thank you kindly and... haha... think about it you little dork... Have a good blond moment... jk... or not... Have a good hunting... and fun...

I worship your taste
The way you walk
The way you stare
The way you talk

I want you more in my life
You fallow my guide
I dream to make you my wife
You stand by my side


That is my favorite part, simply beautiful and so relatable, the whole poem.

Thank you too dear... ummmm... Ummm... Its dorky... but I see your name as more mysterious... It depends why your name is exactly... so funny choice... Actually part of what I *worship* in girls was supposed to be expanded... but i guess this way its more poetical... The second part you choose gives me some silly deja vu... Hmmm... You make me think about someone... Intresting... Anyway... I am happy you like it whole...

well...you don't have to have love at this moment just to be allowed to make such a gream poem. It's about how you write it; with or without feeling.... you did a good job Robert but I miss articles but idk...that's my opinion.

all in all well done.

Thank you for good opinion and a bit of criticism... I think I would care about articles... but I rather do it only when I dont rush and my poem takes more than few days... This one took like two hours of free thinking... I only cared about content... not about a cover... I think I do the same with most of things in my life... Well... I am terribly tired... and internet is slow... i think i need to hit pillow by my head... Today was warm like volcano... uh... damm it... I have to write an email... uh... Cya.....

[hazel681]

what blonde moment? i have those 25/8 so yeah! lol

[ummm]

Thank you too dear... ummmm... Ummm... Its dorky... but I see your name as more mysterious... It depends why your name is exactly... so funny choice... Actually part of what I *worship* in girls was supposed to be expanded... but i guess this way its more poetical... The second part you choose gives me some silly deja vu... Hmmm... You make me think about someone... Intresting... Anyway... I am happy you like it whole...


That's me right there...... a mystery 

Your poems are really good so your welcome

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

what blonde moment? i have those 25/8 so yeah! lol

Since when you have longer day lol? ... From us both only me from different planet can be ... jk... I think I will make a balance you little dork ... You keep on having blond moment ... I will have some nerdy sweat time ... since it happened I have some serious staff to take care off ... like from tomorrow morning ... Now... hehe... having this little time for relaxing chat ... Dang..... its close to bed time

Ummm ... you are welcome too ...

[hazel681]

^haha longer day for me jk i have brown hair but inside im really blonde, im a pineapple.

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

^I see .. uh... I mean I dont see ... haha... Yeah... Good comparison with great lead to sweet part ... I think its good start for beauty poem ... I would try to write... Idk... I cant get enough time... Maybe you will be faster... if you see it as good fun ... And shhhh silly ... or you will tell me colour of your eyes and all anything else I wouldnt even dare to ask about ... Ummm... Woha... I feel embarrassed .. haha... I need to figure out some sweet revenge ... What dose of blush on your cheeks you are asking for? ... haha.. jk... I have no rights to treat you like that you little blond dork