Topic: Craving

[dutchgirlfan]

thank you...that means alot

[Greek]

B, every time i read some thing you have written it gets better and better!

[dutchgirlfan]

ghehe..thank you laura
Posted on: March 24, 2008, 11:27:24 AMLet us...

Let us dream
Let us watch the blue sky
Give us the chance to smile
And the oppurtunity for our tears to dry

Let us forget
Let us remember peace
Send away the rain
And bring us back the summerbreeze

Let us live
Let us hug each other
Feel the love from your familly
From your father, mother...sister and brother

Let us dream
Let us sleep forever
Never stop this dream world
Let us live peacefully together

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

Ghehe ... I have got the point ... and I admit I got it in beauty way ... Thanks ... You are incredible with putting your words with so gentle manner ... You have talent for sure ... I like the most this part:

Let us forget
Let us remember peace
Send away the rain
And bring us back the summerbreeze

Ehhhhhhhh... summer

[dutchgirlfan]

haha thank you robert I'm glad you got the point
and thnx for having faith in me

[hazel681]

its beautiful whats great about your writing, is it gives a visual, i can see every single thing in your mind, in your heart.

[Fiona682]

Let us, as soon as I read it I had this image-a past life, a book maybe-of near the 4th of July someone laying in the green grass and blue sky with fireworks soon to come that night. That is just what I saw, what I remember maybe. I like it, it was good, sad, heartwhelming and true. Keep it up

[dutchgirlfan]

thnx

[hazel681]

welcomes

[dutchgirlfan]

Search for my life

I wanna go
And never look back
Just run away...
And stay away

I want to stop
Really want to quit
Feelings, I don’t belong here
It simply doesn’t fit

Where are my ways?
Where are my dreams to catch?
How will I fill in my days?
Knowing bliss and life will be a match?

I can’t give it a place

Oh I can’t give it a place
Not even one single spot
Laying there on the stretched surface
Surrounded by poisened blood

Encircled by bars
Consisted of my skin
Only showing ugly scars
Marking all my attempts for escaping

Oh...I really can’t give it a place
I tried so darn hard
But every time I take a shot
It only torns my heart apart

Where is my entire life?
The puzzle is only getting bigger
When will this struggle end
As It’s time to pull over the trigger....

[I-am-@ddicted]

wow that last one is powerful!!! love it!!

keep writing

[Mrok(Gloom)Robert M]

You turn bud into flower... You expand in beauty poetical way something I would put into one grey lyrical sentence... Your talent is great... i agree with Kathrina that yours *I cant give it a place* is powerful... I like words choices the most... and it has your intresting dark style.. Write on

[hazel681]

your last poem...omfg im speechless. that totally BLEW me away out of this world. im sooooooo amazed and enthralled by that poem. one of the best i've ever read in my life.

[dutchgirlfan]

omg...everyone is so positive about the last one...I didn't expect that.. thnx y'all

Posted on: March 27, 2008, 10:03:03 AMSo here 2 new ones....

Help yourself

I locked myself
Under the ground
It’s dark
Cold
And scary
I can’t move around

The bugs are tickling
They are everywhere
On the ground
At my skin
Even in my eyes and ears
And they have lots to share

What about their noise
That revolting sound
Of little, dirty, disgusting wings
Which makes you shiver every sec
And screaming oh so loud
But still...you aren’t found

Found by people who care
Who loves you
And are sick of worrying
Realizing they can’t help you
You have to see for yourself
That this is just a nightmare

Prisoner in my life

This room
Is surrounded
Is encircled
Is filled
With memories
With the past
With me

The walls are big
But not stopping
The walls are refusing
They still wanna grow
To be the biggest
To be the highest
To be the largest

I am
So tiny
So little
So full of dreams
And plans
To move on
To live in the future

But there
Where they left
Where they discovered
I am still here
I am stil searching
To find my way out
To break down these walls

To throw away
The past
The history
Without forgetting
All the good
All the best
Of my memory.

[hazel681]

they both rock but i love love love the last one